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Nowadays, advertisements show up far and wide, including schools. While some people think that they advance school budget, the others might argue that school is not a good place for advertising because children are not suitable audiences of advertising. This essay in addressing why we can place advertisements in school.

Firstly, advertisements, especially ones with positive educational content help children pay more attention to the educational product that are being advertised, and therefore feel more exciting when they are learning. For example, a book publisher should be able to put a book banner which is a visual photo of a boy or a girl who is reading a book in a peaceful park, together with the message “Reading book will help us to build a peaceful world”. This advertisement is a good message that will motivate children to read. Thus, they will have better social knowledge as well as improve their mindset to build a better world.

Secondly, posters which are promoting sports should be excellent method that can be used to motivate children to do more outdoor exercises. For example, attractive photos of children who are playing football, basketball, swimming, etc. will trigger children to play the games. Hence, they will have a healthier life and help they relieve stress from studying at school.

However, advertisements are not always suitable for placing in school zone. For example, the pornography brochures should be completely banned from school. This is because the sexual photos create negative impact on children's mind, so all content must be controlled strictly and carefully by parents and teachers.

In conclusion, we can place the advertisements in the schools with proper content. Advertisements are not only a funding channel but also are the utilities to broaden kid's imagniation and creative ability.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34693877551 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98456547585 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581632653061 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5503094598 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.25 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.375 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5625 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238232753968 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860889415682 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898626401299 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147592894172 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0927638182235 0.056905535591 163% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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