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some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics: some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The military services of any country have always seen a dearth of female candidates. However, more women are now working in military jobs. There are many arguments for and against women working in the military, however, I believe that women have the right to make their own choices.

The people who believe that women should be allowed to join the military forces, say so keeping fairness in mind. In other words, no job can be monopolized by males or females, and that people should be allowed to decide for themselves. In the present times, we see women taking on and performing outstandingly well on almost all the jobs that were once traditionally dominated by men. The phenomenal contribution by women to various sectors in employment is commendable. This is also the case for developing countries, where women, until a few years ago, were not even given an equal status to men in the society.

However, it is also argued that women should not join the army, navy or the air force. It doesn't seem an appropriate career choice for women, considering their physical strength will not outweigh as that of men. Also military jobs require months of staying away from home in possibly adverse conditions, which might be a difficult situation to handle for women with children. In a family where both parents work, a woman would not be able to adjust her family life with her job in the military. But these are situations I feel that don't affect women who are not under such responsibilities, and these women may very well be able to work in the armed forces.

To conclude, I believe women to be pretty capable of multitasking, and certainly not less skilful than men. Therefore, I definitely agree on letting women join the army, the navy or the air force.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, i feel, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7868852459 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.644859323 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570491803279 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1830438255 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259904037294 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975437734732 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083441226688 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16978982842 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757846521779 0.056905535591 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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