Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.
Animal captivity in zoos has been highlighted as an emerging issue, capturing significant public outcry due to the questions of animal cruelty. Despite the positive implications regarding to wildlife protection, the closure of zoos would be more beneficial.
On the one hand, zoos could be fraught with many cruelty-related pitfalls. First, Since animals are kept in captivity from the natural habitats, their exposure to monotonous habits and tangible enclosures such as cages and fences , limiting their physical movements and flexibility could be an inevitable product. This could be associated with animals’ susceptibility to mental disorders, leading to the formation of stress and abnormal repetitive behaviours. In addition, Due to limited budget disbursements on many zoo facilities, animal welfare negligence ensues, making animal breeds subjected to squalid conditions, regimens with nutrition deficiencies and even sometimes barbaric repressive acts from caretakers. If animals have to endure such conditions for a specific period of time, the possibilities of their vulnerability to malnutrition and hazardous epidemic are relatively high, eventually shortening their life expectancy.
On the other hand, it is true that zoos could act as contributors to the wildlife protection. Specifically, by keeping animals in zoos or other conservancy facilities with forestry guards, the protection of wildlife animals from possible poachers could be guaranteed, thereby increasing the number of wildlife species and maintaining the ecosystem balance. For instance, in many African nations, the local official authorities pour considerable public budget on zoos and many animal preservation parks for the conservation of rhino breeds, which have fell prey to many poachers who would conduct illegal underground trafficking activities of the rhino horns to many Asian nations for its medical treatment beliefs, making their numbers triple and saving them from the brink of extinction.
In conclusion, I believe that animals should not be kept in zoos because of the problems of mental disorders from limited movements and low-quality living conditions. The governments and animal rights advocates should take effective initiatives to combat the issues of animal cruelty in zoo facilities for the betterment of animal well-being.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, so, well, even so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.87976539589 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16418179655 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601173020528 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.2026987568 49.4020404114 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.083333333 106.682146367 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4166666667 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135082603448 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677264009084 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437872020156 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0983810048641 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181787011019 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.0946893788 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 50.2224549098 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.12 12.4159519038 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.0 8.58950901804 128% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 78.4519038076 164% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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