Some pp think success in life comes from hardworking and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
some hold the opinion that it is hardworking and determination that make us succeed, while others consider outlook and budget more fundamental. From my prospective, all of these factors contribute to our achievements in life.
For one, effort and determination are the solutions which make up to 90% of our success in life. Not everyone was born with talent, hardworking will lead them to successful outcomes. For instance, unlike messi, Ronaldo was born untalented at football. However, he has been playing soccer from the day when he first saw a ball until now. Training everyday help him to have better skills. As a result, he has become messi biggest opponent at the moment, and he is as famous as messi. There is a well-known saying that " Practice makes perfect " and it is completely undoubted.
On the all the hand, appearance and money are not as vital as the factors i mentioned above, because they does not last long. they only contribute to our beginning success. Temporary idols are some clear examples. they maybe success at first sight, maybe for a few years or more. But when the get older, they doesn't look as good as they used to be, so their fame decrease significantly. People relying on their appearance and money will find it hard to make lucrative income in their late years and they may have to live on a budget.
In conclusion, money and appearance only help you for several years. I always believe that hard work and determination pays off, which will make sure your long-term success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1265.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82824427481 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66893253238 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610687022901 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3158688332 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.4117647059 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4117647059 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155741719554 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466129896306 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039526022121 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10175585371 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435824405672 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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