Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do u support it or not? (Agree/Disagree)

Essay topics:

Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do u support it or not? (Agree/Disagree)

Everyone has their own dream to become popular in the world. When thinking about this, they have to decide how they want to be and which industry they want to be popular. For example, the stars from sports and film industries are more popular in the world nowadays because of the media and corporate companies.

Being a successful star in any industry is quite complicated job due to high volume of competition. Everyone has their own talent. As long as they get chance, will prove their ability and becoming a star. The sports stars are more popular than other, due to media focus, television shows and marketing industries. Moreover,the important given by the government and other private organizations for sports and film industries are highly supported.

When youngster want to achieve something in the world, their fist think is about film industry or sports. Who is famous in that department, how they are become very famous. These are all the thinking coming to their mind and deciding their path accordingly. Considering the fact, they have to get motivated by the stars by following personality of the film stars and attitude of the sports stars. The sports stars will have aggressive mind to achieve the goal and film stars will have very good personality become popular.

My point of view,youngsters can take advantages from the stars. but should not follow them very deeply. which will lead to different direction of their life.

Votes
Average: 4.1 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'star'.
Suggestion: star
...ability and becoming a star. The sports stars are more popular than other, due to med...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 323, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...shows and marketing industries. Moreover,the important given by the government and o...
^^^^
Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'star'.
Suggestion: star
...ttitude of the sports stars. The sports stars will have aggressive mind to achieve th...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 17, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , youngsters
...ity become popular. My point of view,youngsters can take advantages from the stars. but...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ers can take advantages from the stars. but should not follow them very deeply. whi...
^^^
Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...but should not follow them very deeply. which will lead to different direction of the...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...but should not follow them very deeply. which will lead to different direction of the...
^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'but', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.24907063197 0.268076937826 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.159851301115 0.116061578633 138% => OK
Adjectives: 0.092936802974 0.0759168565197 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0408921933086 0.0366838410393 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0557620817844 0.0131127313244 425% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0855018587361 0.155750635184 55% => OK
Participles: 0.0446096654275 0.0379272487307 118% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63532847704 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0408921933086 0.0210936926555 194% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0817843866171 0.0948980150116 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0223048327138 0.00437022459523 510% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0260223048327 0.00967000014798 269% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1449.0 1161.00487805 125% => OK
No of words: 241.0 196.9 122% => OK
Chars per words: 6.01244813278 5.90752243213 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 3.73763899035 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319502074689 0.337110787985 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.232365145228 0.247514529752 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.178423236515 0.171178102325 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.120331950207 0.112407865282 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63532847704 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53112033195 0.546246751206 97% => OK
Word variations: 50.2345110609 49.3433353143 102% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 8.93414634146 179% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0625 23.0094962315 65% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0422531569 42.9750493124 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5625 135.714022679 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0625 23.0094962315 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.375 0.689975730869 54% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.84146341463 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.48048780488 473% => OK
Readability: 38.2990145228 47.7609492067 80% => OK
Elegance: 1.47826086957 2.94281807926 50% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207822974295 0.418131533498 50% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0936368067583 0.181151798455 52% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.107123451667 0.0850326197045 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.478543619542 0.706616315825 68% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135793731351 0.157042692854 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784330721191 0.228904883108 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683381946033 0.108899403657 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.338096464216 0.367819155151 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0832311350057 0.0812612215331 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141557306795 0.316326947829 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409773033343 0.0921553760075 44% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70731707317 324% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.08536585366 98% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 3.16585365854 284% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.02926829268 33% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 7.1512195122 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

The essay belongs to task II, not task I. This is the evaluation report according to task II:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'star'.
Suggestion: star
...ability and becoming a star. The sports stars are more popular than other, due to med...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 323, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...shows and marketing industries. Moreover,the important given by the government and o...
^^^^
Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'star'.
Suggestion: star
...ttitude of the sports stars. The sports stars will have aggressive mind to achieve th...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 17, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , youngsters
...ity become popular. My point of view,youngsters can take advantages from the stars. but...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ers can take advantages from the stars. but should not follow them very deeply. whi...
^^^
Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...but should not follow them very deeply. which will lead to different direction of the...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...but should not follow them very deeply. which will lead to different direction of the...
^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'but', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.24907063197 0.247107183377 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.159851301115 0.155533422707 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.092936802974 0.0946595960268 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0408921933086 0.0501214627716 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0557620817844 0.0437548338989 127% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0855018587361 0.122226691241 70% => OK
Participles: 0.0446096654275 0.0403226058552 111% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63532847704 2.80594681477 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0408921933086 0.0326793684256 125% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0817843866171 0.0861772015684 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0223048327138 0.021408717616 104% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0260223048327 0.011925033212 218% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1449.0 1933.35771543 75% => OK
No of words: 241.0 316.048096192 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01244813278 6.12580529183 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20517956788 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319502074689 0.374742101984 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.232365145228 0.28420135186 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.178423236515 0.203846283523 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.120331950207 0.137316102897 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63532847704 2.80594681477 94% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 176.037074148 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53112033195 0.56093040696 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.2345110609 60.7387585426 83% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0891783567 99% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0625 20.7743622355 73% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0422531569 49.517814964 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5625 127.492653851 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0625 20.7743622355 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.375 0.814263465372 46% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.99599198397 175% => OK
Readability: 38.2990145228 49.1944974215 78% => OK
Elegance: 1.47826086957 1.69124875643 87% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207822974295 0.332605444948 62% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0936368067583 0.102741220458 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.107123451667 0.0668466124924 160% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.478543619542 0.534860350844 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135793731351 0.148594505496 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784330721191 0.134430193775 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683381946033 0.0742795772207 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.338096464216 0.324371583561 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0832311350057 0.0638462369009 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141557306795 0.228012699653 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409773033343 0.058150111329 70% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.68436873747 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.5751503006 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.