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These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in terms of family development?

Essay topics: These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in terms of family development?

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It is irrefutable that immigration has taken mammoth dimension all over the global cosmos nowadays. Many folks leave their own nation for work in alien country and take their family with them too. I think it will be win-win situation about these and family development.

People go to other countries for settlement and this statement represent some reasons as follows. First and foremost, for some people to work in other country is like a dream so they do whatever it takes for work outside the known surrounding. What is more, some people completed their study in abroad then they get involved in that culture and take their family also over there. Lastly, for some people work in abroad is like money making machine. To instance, from my nation india numbers of people go to alien countries and cities to earn money. For an example in london because our indian currency is much week than that so people work their and earn very handsome money with less time work as compare to india along with this they take their parents and become permanent citizen over there.

On the countryside, every garden has weeds similarly it has also some downsides. Firstly, people nowadays forgetting their own culture and moral value of their tradition also. Secondly, more people go there and work there then ultimately it affect our financial aspect of our country. Finally, in some cases few people can not take whole family with their so it cause to be improper family relation. By chance they meet their family members and spend quality time with them.

To sum up, i pen down to saying that work in abroad is not bad thing to do but one should consider their family members as an important factor and spend quality time with them by returning back home and it well said that end of earth is home only.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ture and moral value of their tradition also. Secondly, more people go there and wor...
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...there and work there then ultimately it affect our financial aspect of our country. Fi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'lastly', 'second', 'secondly', 'similarly', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'i think', 'in some cases', 'to sum up', 'what is more']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233727810651 0.247107183377 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.162721893491 0.155533422707 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0739644970414 0.0946595960268 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0887573964497 0.0501214627716 177% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0887573964497 0.0437548338989 203% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.130177514793 0.122226691241 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0177514792899 0.0403226058552 44% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.24619845998 2.80594681477 80% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0295857988166 0.0326793684256 91% => OK
Particles: 0.00295857988166 0.00163938923432 180% => OK
Determiners: 0.0621301775148 0.0861772015684 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00887573964497 0.021408717616 41% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00295857988166 0.011925033212 25% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1798.0 1933.35771543 93% => OK
No of words: 314.0 316.048096192 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72611464968 6.12580529183 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20517956788 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.305732484076 0.374742101984 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.184713375796 0.28420135186 65% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.124203821656 0.203846283523 61% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0859872611465 0.137316102897 63% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24619845998 2.80594681477 80% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.037074148 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541401273885 0.56093040696 97% => OK
Word variations: 56.6980459719 60.7387585426 93% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.9333333333 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3306747816 49.517814964 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.866666667 127.492653851 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9333333333 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.06666666667 0.814263465372 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.99599198397 150% => OK
Readability: 39.404670913 49.1944974215 80% => OK
Elegance: 1.12173913043 1.69124875643 66% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448601987178 0.332605444948 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.105565771286 0.102741220458 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0890604209581 0.0668466124924 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.514068640541 0.534860350844 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153889102489 0.148594505496 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169820224993 0.134430193775 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988588294117 0.0742795772207 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.290228443217 0.324371583561 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0662428698072 0.0638462369009 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299987680482 0.228012699653 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360524648414 0.058150111329 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.41683366733 234% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 1.9629258517 306% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

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