These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in terms of family development

Nowadays a great quantity of people choose to work abroad rather than work in home country. The underlie reason is working domesticly no longer generate sufficient income to support their families. Thus, some people work in foreign country and take their family with them. This practice induces contentious debate on the advantages and flaws of family development. Personally, I believe the merits outweith demerits.

The disadvantage of taking family and working abroad is that they cannot benefit from the medical walfare system. Normally, only residents are obliged the right to rigester into medicare. Whereas, visitors are excluded from walfare of medicare. People who work in abroad are visitors. Therefore, they have to pay large lump when they are examined in hospital. Whilst, they must pay more money than natives on medicine. In Australia. visitors have to pay 60 dollars for a bottle of gluecosmine. Natives only need spend 6.89 dollars for the same medicine for chemist.

On the other hand, the advantage is that visitors who are granted a work visa are capable of making much more money than in their own country. Higher hourly pay and the ratio between currency appeal visitors to work abroad. Workers on visa earn money easily. In the mean time, They live a higher standard of living, which is significantly different from the original country. For instance, food are extremely cheap in Australia that render the abundence of meals. And the bus in Australia is pleasantly comfortable, which is otterly different from China.

To recapitulate, there are dimerits and merits of working abroad and taking family to live together. I believe the advantage outweigh the advantage. Living in a foreign country enable people to experience a totally different life, which difinitely facilitate family development.

Votes
Average: 5.5 (7 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...broad rather than work in home country. The underlie reason is working domesticly no longer ...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ed the right to rigester into medicare. Whereas, visitors are excluded from walfare of ...
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Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Visitors
...than natives on medicine. In Australia. visitors have to pay 60 dollars for a bottle of ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['if', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'whereas', 'for instance', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253822629969 0.247107183377 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.165137614679 0.155533422707 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.085626911315 0.0946595960268 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0703363914373 0.0501214627716 140% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0336391437309 0.0437548338989 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.119266055046 0.122226691241 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0336391437309 0.0403226058552 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67591761407 2.80594681477 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0275229357798 0.0326793684256 84% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0733944954128 0.0861772015684 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00611620795107 0.021408717616 29% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0214067278287 0.011925033212 180% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1826.0 1933.35771543 94% => OK
No of words: 290.0 316.048096192 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.29655172414 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.444827586207 0.374742101984 119% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.324137931034 0.28420135186 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21724137931 0.203846283523 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134482758621 0.137316102897 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67591761407 2.80594681477 95% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.037074148 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541379310345 0.56093040696 97% => OK
Word variations: 55.1751010312 60.7387585426 91% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0891783567 143% => OK
Sentence length: 12.6086956522 20.7743622355 61% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8093718096 49.517814964 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.3913043478 127.492653851 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.6086956522 20.7743622355 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.304347826087 0.814263465372 37% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 45.0224887556 49.1944974215 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.51136363636 1.69124875643 89% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301987576836 0.332605444948 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0741267917883 0.102741220458 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0705557469147 0.0668466124924 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.407243622507 0.534860350844 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.122618763025 0.148594505496 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102746364685 0.134430193775 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959644594778 0.0742795772207 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.314729814006 0.324371583561 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0848940683292 0.0638462369009 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236540071949 0.228012699653 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105466038185 0.058150111329 181% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.41683366733 205% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 1.9629258517 255% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 10.4468937876 163% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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