Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Today, advertising plays a significant and considerable role in people encouragement to buy the products. The domination of these activities is not restricted to specific goods, and if encompasses all types of urgent or unnecessary needs of human lives. It is totally agreed that the promotions entice people to purchase some goods in which they do not the real need. This will be shown by looking at two mains facets of this process.
Firstly, one of the most prominent purposes of advertisements is attracting the consumers' attentions towards goods that are not necessary. The reason of this claim will be inferred from the huge amount of money in which companies pay in a financial year. Financial reports of a pioneer kitchen appliances company in Iran, Pars Khazar Co., reveal this issue that managers spend more than half of their profits for all types of their promotions. The content of these advertisements was about some appliances like dicer, mixer and so on which are not absolutely required in a house. Thus, this example illustrates the link between effects of promotions on consumer behavior for buying unnecessary goods.
In addition to this, commercial advertisements by virtue of over-embellishing of the positive feature or properties of products, have a lot of attempt to exciting viewer or audiences. A good example for this subject is a promotion of slim products like fat burners drugs. Not only physicians but also all people know this fact that these drugs are not essential for losing weight. Therefore, it is unmistakably obvious that how promotions affect on consumers for buying products that are not inevitable.
I can be drawn a conclusion from the above passage that the advertisement industry has a key role in the marketing of some products. It is recommended that people before buying a product, pay enough attention to their needs and the reality of claims in which are made by producers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, so, therefore, thus, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09463722397 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99986233667 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574132492114 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0781094806 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.666666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139559875498 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514563260537 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635953278857 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0898131015343 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507884083564 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.