Today people are living longer, so they should work longer. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Today people are living longer, so they should work longer. Do you agree or disagree?

With the significant development of life condition, opinion has been devided on whether or not working period of people should be prolonged. Notwithstanding, the idea is that senior citizens should be in their occupations longer is against my belief.
In my opinion, elder people would want to enjoy their freedom for doing their favorite things and spending time with their family. Granted that their beloved activities might be restrained by striving to obtain stable high-paid jobs, they could try ones which are such pleasures of old ages include growing a garden, cooking and traveling. Moreover, their regular existence of their family would, likely, make them to unite. For example, spending time with their kids or even their grand children in any events can form chances to understand each other.
On the other hand, there are bound to be those who doubt this belief. One opinion would be the fact that senior citizens have much more experience than the younger one so that they can contribute more to society, especially to economics, but long life does not mean healthy life and I doubt that their bodies can bear an enormous amount of work. A second opinion would be the fact that old-age pension could be a burden of society, but their contribution during their occupations are adequate.
In conclusion, I fully support the view that senior citizens should retire and enjoy their hobbies which are confined by their great time for careers.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... condition, opinion has been devided on whether or not working period of people should be prol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1217.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 241.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04979253112 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50967721219 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609958506224 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 368.1 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7626637853 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.7 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0917650803275 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415349384108 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454125599563 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691209927696 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585738558584 0.056905535591 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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