Topic All parents create the best opportunities for their children There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for children s future

Essay topics:

Topic: All parents create the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for children’s future.

It is true that children is provided kind of amenities in their studies by their parents. Some people who consider that children should educated to develop their skills by in their schools, while view of other people that having diverse information of their subjects which is being studied in their schools, will be profitable for their futures. We will discuss both views in this essay.
Some people reckon that children should learn diverse sciences in their schools for their futures. This is because learning different subjects would be beneficial why to encourage their promotion. For instance Apple company which was associated by Steve Jobs who is the best billionaire in the worldwide, his company is not recruited just engineers to start work. His company engineers are as smart as scientists. Because people should have IQ knowledge to work in APPLE company. As a result The government of APPLE company puts them worth group in their working.
On the other hand, while other people argue that children should taught to develop their abilities in their studying. Because needful sciences is not educated well in those schools. For example teaching Math subject is low in our education system. Therefore people who wants to enter the university, should attend in additional courses why in order to get better result in university of test system, otherwise they can not gain enough knowledge while studying at school.
In conclusion, government of education system should develop teaching at schools. Moreover might be they should encourage salary of masterships who educate to the children at schools.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...rmation of their subjects which is being studied in their schools, will be profit...
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...y engineers are as smart as scientists. Because people should have IQ knowledge to work...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... IQ knowledge to work in APPLE company. As a result The government of APPLE compan...
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...puts them worth group in their working. On the other hand, while other people ar...
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...elop their abilities in their studying. Because needful sciences is not educated well i...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
...subject is low in our education system. Therefore people who wants to enter the universit...
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Suggestion: Moreover,
...tem should develop teaching at schools. Moreover might be they should encourage salary o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 10.4138276553 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1356.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23552123552 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55454356376 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532818532819 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.9857760918 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2666666667 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.86666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33716938882 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111242846068 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101303972578 0.0667982634062 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210721171371 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565517348188 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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