We have three important parts of education: reading, writing, and math.some people think every child will benefit from a fourth skill added to the list: computer skill. Do you agree or disagree?
Recently some people argue that the curriculum cannot be without computer subject because of its key role in our life. I think this view should be considered both sides before deciding it is true or not.
On the one hand, some people advocate that young students would take tremendous advantages as the technological subject is emphasized. The first reason is that an early exposure to the computer would help students broaden their knowledge and experience things beyond where they live. For example, when they access to the BBC’s learning English website, they likely have more chance to expose native speakers in order to perfect their grammar and explore foreign costumes without costing a large amount for English classes. Besides, adding this subject to children’s curriculum allows them to likely expertise in computer skills, which apparently promote their future career path. In fact, nowadays, employers often require candidates to have an influence on the appliances; therefore, the computer is extremely necessary and should be appreciated.
Although these explanations are justifiable, I am convinced the fact that giving this subject a priority on the same amount of literacy and mathematics in the first stage is completely necessary. Firstly, computer subject would force children to spend more time on studying, which hinders them to participate in outdoor activities to develop themselves comprehensively. As a result, they might get obesity due to the lack of physical exercises. Another reason is that the frequent interaction with appealing and various sources may interfere children with the concentration. Therefore, they would likely to watch youtube videos or chatting with friends on Facebook rather than concentrate on doing homework, contributing to their result degradation at school.
In conclusion, I accept that computer can offer a variety of benefits, but it might be more suitable for older students than the youngsters. Therefore, the number of traditional subjects should be unchanged to avoid likelihood consequences for children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57413249211 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95950168111 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621451104101 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1499521129 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.214285714 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64285714286 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0615006193196 0.244688304435 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0213938961904 0.084324248473 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0167418116962 0.0667982634062 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.037601924999 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195680030457 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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