When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, technological advancements are increasingly having profound impact on almost every aspect of people’s lives. It is often argued that this impact is so incredible that it would make traditional skills and lifestyle obsolete. From my perspective, I think that they should continue thriving by means of supplying alternatives to the modern life and innovative ideas for the high tech world.

To commence with, conventional customs and traditions play a significantly crucial part in the civilization of human history. All nations have their own traditional practices manifesting their culture, history which have been maintained, and developed as well as passed down from generation to generation. At the time when globalization takes place in every different fields of life, it is of critical importance to preserve these traditions as a means to show our respect and gratitude to our ancestors, and our origins. A country has to protect their own cultural identities so that they can take pride in them and regard them as a symbol of their history.

However, no one can deny the fast speed of modern technology which can transform our world. Innovative ideas and products should be stimulated and invested to achieve extraordinary feats making life much easier and productive. In almost every industry, machines and AI are taking priority over human as they are capable of bringing a higher efficaciousness, more accuracy and result in an exponential growth in sales. Furthermore, it is highly likely that traditional customs can be a great source of inspiration for creative and groundbreaking ideas and inventions. For instance, sparked by how women in some ethnic minority knit words and images into their sweaters, some businessman from the textile industry

have developed some productions line by applying the traditional skills to CAD. The product which increases their investment in preserving conventional skills for further creating high – tech appliances has induced a huge profit and brought a sustainable revenue.

To sum up, although the evolution of technology can make some of the customs become obsolete, some still flourish as their roles are increasingly highly appreciated and applied to tech products.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, still, well, as for, as to, for instance, i think, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46418338109 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10191473539 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590257879656 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4886317922 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.214285714 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9285714286 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0995306088988 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347369294343 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295142283719 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0539548148457 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390300769859 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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