Wherther or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that people attain their success mostly by luck. While I accept luck have an important role in helping people reach their target. I would argue that hard–work and determination are much more crucial factors that contribute to achievement of individual.
On one hand, I believe that people who work hard and determine will achieve their success. Hard–working people usually get their aims. For instance, Mark Elliot Zuckerberg spent thousand of hours to coding and experimenting to bring out the great chatting online whose name Facebook that we use today. Furthermore, determined people may get their target in whatever they do. Jack Ma is the good example for people who always determines. He never felt unhappy, even if he was rejected his enrollment application by Harvard University for 10 times or was denied a job position for many times by employees. Now he becomes a billionaire and runs a biggest E commerce company in the world.
On the other hand, it is clear that luck is only a small factor that help people to gain success. People who hope to be lucky to reach their objectives always fail. For instance, if a student does not study for an exam he will get bad results. Moreover, luck contributes to short-term fortune. If someone wins the lottery it definitely means that they are lucky because winning a lottery does not require to do anything to earn it. Although, a person can win the lottery occationlly, he can not win a lottery for whole life. Therefore, people can not depend on luck to get their success.
Conclusion, luck is the factor that brings success to people, but I believe that determination and hark-work are much more important than that.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...le attain their success mostly by luck. While I accept luck have an important role in...
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Line 2, column 178, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
... instance, Mark Elliot Zuckerberg spent thousand of hours to coding and experimenting to...
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Line 2, column 643, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
.... Now he becomes a billionaire and runs a biggest E commerce company in the world...
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Line 3, column 406, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...ause winning a lottery does not require to do anything to earn it. Although, a person...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88541666667 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73554483353 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590277777778 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3136935775 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.1666666667 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126708225512 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495775222071 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475463228582 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0843089682007 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042446632522 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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