You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic.
Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 254 words.
The increase in obesity in the swelling scale has been a pressing issue these days. A majority blames the government for being partly responsible for this unhealthy trend. From my perspective, these individuals’ statement is justified.
Nowadays, junk food conspicuously has become prevalent in every culture and preferred by teenagers and employers. The eponymous industry also rakes in specializing in cranking out these harmful products which later wreak havoc on people’s health. Yet, as the leading figures of this field are willing to pay hefty tariffs and levies that contribute to the government’s allocated budgets, competent authorities and bureaucrats rarely take any hard-line against them. The lucre officials indirectly receive, more or less, has incentivized the insatiable avarice of some politicians and later renders the surging heaps of fat-encumbered food into the market.
On the other hand, the government also fails to raise people’s awareness about fast food. They should have had propagated risks posed by an unhealthy lifestyle and enforced some ordinances on the amount of sugar straddling with these products to make sure citizens will not put on weight rapidly. However, they choose to keep mum and never pay heed to how to reform the recipe or launch any project to help people stay fit notwithstanding the obvious threats derived from consuming carp or the like. Thus, the government is certain to be held accountable for the rise in obesity of late.
In conclusion, though people’s lifestyle is the determinant to decide whether they are overweight or not, the government can not shirk their responsibility. Before all the population of the world becomes less agile and more obese, they should take action forthrightly so that everything will be put into place.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... individuals’ statement is justified. Nowadays, junk food conspicuously has be...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that everything will be put into place.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, well, in conclusion, more or less, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41696113074 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98258334648 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664310954064 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9417060598 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.923076923 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15177512731 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523219945611 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556802161659 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874960559845 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437123061983 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.