You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged Others believe that children who are taught to co operate rather than compete become more useful

Essay topics:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 254 words.

The most effective method for raise the children is can be different for each parents.Some part of parents can be support the encouraged to enfants for competitions and the other consider the opposite taught.

First of all,competitions are can be usefull if they managed very carefully by mature people.In the parents observing they can taste the a bit of real life with in this way.Firstly, in competitions there is no place for two winner.Even in just simply basic game or regular exam in school kids always in this this situation.So maybe, if they be aware to this position they can be more strong for tomorrows.Thus, also need to learn how to lose gently and how to gain some of experience from this situation.With this learnt they can be more strong for the new competitions.

Despite of this opinion also according to some people in be compete not useful for kids.They should be learn how to make something with other kids or how accomplish to duty with co-operate.When the working with the other kids they can be learn team game and how to do make duty sharing.This ability can improvement to their work life, school life and even social life with their friends or family.

In my opinion, kids should take an experiments from to both sides.Life is not frequently competition,however also that's mean not everything can be gain as a easily.Thus, each kids should be learn coherently to both sides.Without the one side kids cannot be able to successful in the real life,school or work life.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, thus, even so, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1248.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.875 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0685129109 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5234375 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 386.1 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 64.0 20.2975951904 315% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 132.482074259 49.4020404114 268% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 312.0 106.682146367 292% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 64.0 20.7667163134 308% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.5 7.06120827912 304% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.01903807615 498% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158903339172 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103482255296 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0169804063648 0.0667982634062 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103482255296 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169804063648 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.6 13.0946893788 257% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 14.98 50.2224549098 30% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.1 11.3001002004 240% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 9.78957915832 296% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 27.6 10.1190380762 273% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 10.7795591182 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.