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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines.Should parents be made by

Essay topics: You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.

Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines.

Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

You should write at least 250 words.

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Since the early 1700s when vaccines were discovered, the ability of vaccines to prevent infectious diseases has been proven to be highly effective. Nevertheless, some people still choose not to immunize their children for some reasons due to the lack of the obligation for vaccination. Therefore, for the sake of the improved healthcare for people, I believe such obligation should be implemented.

In 1980s, there was a concern pertaining to the ability of vaccines to induce autism in babies. A decade later, a medical journal proofing such concern was released which shook the world. Even though that journal was found out to be fraudulent later, many people still believe that detrimental effect of vaccines. As a result, years later, for the first time in 30 years, a case of measles appeared in Spain in an infant because his parents did not want to vaccinate him due to autism concerns. Therefore, the lack of medical knowledge in societies can be harmful for their children, especially when they choose not to immunize their children and put them to the fatal risk of infectious diseases.

Before 20th century, there were no concerns of the adverse effects of vaccines, however, many people still did not know vaccines or their benefits. Even more, those people still exist in some countries, making those countries have difficulties in tackling infectious diseases which can be prevented with immunizations. By making it obligatory for parents vaccinating their children, more children can have infectious diseases prevented. Moreover, there will be no more need for health professionals wasting time to convince uneducated people to vaccinate their children. Hence, the law obligates parents to vaccinate their children will lead to more efficient of infectious diseases prevention in children.

In summary, the world need a law to obligate vaccination in children to make infectious diseases prevention can be achieved in most children and to prevent people not to vaccinate their children because of their biased knowledge.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'In the 1980s'.
Suggestion: In the 1980s
...ch obligation should be implemented. In 1980s, there was a concern pertaining to the ...
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Line 5, column 675, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'diseases'' or 'disease's'?
Suggestion: diseases'; disease's
...ll lead to more efficient of infectious diseases prevention in children. In summary, ...
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Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'diseases'' or 'disease's'?
Suggestion: diseases'; disease's
...cination in children to make infectious diseases prevention can be achieved in most chil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, in summary, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33746130031 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84210863568 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501547987616 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0022152953 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.142857143 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14300025597 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591853431476 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343155442044 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976094868711 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146936999428 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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