Young people spend much of their free time on shopping malls. It has negative
effects in both young people and the society that they live in. To what extent do you
agree or disagree?
Currently, the young have tendency to spend the huge amount of time on going to shopping centres in their leisure time. It is believed that this trend can bring the disadvantages to youngsters as well as social as a whole. I strongly agree with this view.
To begin with, spending much free time on going shopping has some negative effects on individuals. First and foremost, this is a hobby which waste time and money. Due to the fact that more time you use for buying something on shopping malls, less time you have for other activities. It is better for people to read the books, learn other language or do other essential things in their free time rather than going out for shopping for hours. Besides, when people go shopping, they are easily attracted by a chain of clothing stores and waste money on unnecessary things because of temporary interest. Other disadvantage is, lose the social relationships, not only with their families but also with friends and colleagues. Since they take the much time to go to malls, they have no time to care about the members in their families and make new friends.
In term of social, the communities can suffer from a decrease in the standard of workforce. In detail, when people fond of going to shopping centres in their leisure time, they will not focus on their work and study. As a result, the economy will be influenced negatively because of the less quality of employees. This means that the standard of their lives drop significantly and the development of the country are much worse than other nations.
In conclusion, I assume that young people should spend less time on shopping malls because of detrimental impacts on both personal and social.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81292517007 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55532742987 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537414965986 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4856207507 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3333333333 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310889422597 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980213155508 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853536078241 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193243597314 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472990273574 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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