22.09.2017 Some people feel that entertainers (e.g film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of job should be highly paid?
Some aver that professional athletes, famous actors and singers earn too much money. I disagree with this prospect and below the reason on which my stance is based will be discussed in details.
To begin with, popular entertainers should have a considerable income. Firstly, their toil makes a large number of individuals happier. In fact, modern people, in particular those who live in rich countries, often have sad, boring and unhappy lives, for instance, statistics stays that one out of three Americans took or have taken anti-depressants. Thus, popular artists make lives of this distressed and folk better and more joyful. Secondly, well-known personalities make a lot of money to their employers and bosses. For instance, a movie that stars a popular actress will likely collect a huge pile of money because viewers adore her and want to see on the big screen. If a beloved star attracts public’s attention and money, the star should get a large salary for the job done. Those are several reasons to pay superstars.
At the same time, there are other occupations that ought to be paid well. Primarily, performing jobs that require high-quality education should lead to a high income. For instance, pilots of aircrafts, doctors, engineers and architects usually spend a fortune and many years on studying those efforts and expenses must be covered in the future because paying decent money for doing the jobs will encourage people to pursue a degree in such fields. Furthermore, risking life or healthy must be appreciated. For instance, police officers and fire fighters are examples of dangerous jobs that demand from workers to go through significant stress on a regular basis. Thus, paying to the brave professionals appears to be logical due to fulfilling their duties often has a disadvantageous effect on their health and money will be needed to maintain their well-being after retirement. Thus, jobs that need having high level of education or perilous ones should be rewarded.
To sum up, those who impact lives of many and who can guarantee success of an enterprise should make a lot of cash. Moreover, learned professionals and those who risk their lives to help others must have considerable payrolls.
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Essay evaluation report
due to fulfilling their duties often has a disadvantageous effect on their health
because fulfilling their duties often has a disadvantageous effect on their health //after 'due to' with words/phrases
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flaws:
There are four 'for instance' found.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1811 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.975 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.704 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.111 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.269 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.46 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.042 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...rable income. Firstly, their toil makes a large number of individuals happier. In fact, modern pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, in fact, in particular, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1456043956 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8229930285 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612637362637 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1795558921 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5789473684 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194526030142 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578799240574 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047657654297 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108661961586 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583444787885 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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