23092017 When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Many claim that technological progress of a state leads to extinction of local customs and traditional lifestyle, and attempting to preserve those traditions and ways of life is meaningless. I disagree with this prospect and below the reasons on which my stance is based will be discussed in details.
On the one hand, there is a correlation between the advancement of technology and dying out local crafts and mores. For instance, the invention and mass production of the automobile forced people to give up exploiting horses and asses as means of transportation, consequently, traditions and crafts that are associated with those animals disappeared as well. Another instance is the advent of the Internet that reshaped traditions and cultures in many countries. In fact, the net has dramatically impacted the way humans work, communicate, relax and study. For instance, a tradition of writing letters on paper has almost become obsolete in Russia because e-mails replaced them. Thus, substitution of old customs by new ones is indeed caused by progress.
On the other hand, it is plausible and useful to keep ancestors’ ways and skills alive. In fact, cultural heritage has crucial importance for keeping a connection between generations in order to maintain a healthy and prosperous society that has a national identity. For instance, Japan has a nationwide social program that cultivates public’s interest in their roots and customs. The fulfillment of the program has allowed Japanese to maintain their national identity in a quickly globalizing world and to have people who are willing to work for the good of the country. Furthermore, maintaining local customs may serve as a big attraction for tourists and their money. For instance, folk of Hawaii managed to use their unusual traditions and forefathers’ way of life to make their country recognizable among others and to promote their island as a tropic heaven that is ideal for recreational activities. Commuters who visit the coastal state joyfully observe and participate in local rituals and ceremonies. Consequently, those are two ways in which preserving traditional skills and mores may be useful.
In my opinion, although technological advancement has a converse impact on spreading ancestors’ crafts, arts, and customs, they should and could be preserved for future generations.
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Essay evaluation report
a tradition of writing letters on paper has almost become obsolete in Russia because e-mails replaced them.
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
folk of Hawaii managed to use
folks of Hawaii managed to use
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flaws:
A lot of 'For instance'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1936 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.232 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.955 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.87 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.411 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.038 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun claim seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many claims'.
Suggestion: Many claims
Many claim that technological progress of a state ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, well, for instance, in fact, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42702702703 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17608852981 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57027027027 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3081764997 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.117647059 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7647058824 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141778533407 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445734797601 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041010196944 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0827780317884 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397249198004 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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