Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.
There are several merits and demerits to sharing personal information with employers. Some people believe that personal information is private and no one should access this kind of information. Others think that giving out this type of information to employers can be useful. From my perspective, every rose is accompanied with thorns, sharing personal information with employers has its own pros and cons.
On the one hand, the majority of people believe that the advantages of sharing personal information with the employer outweigh the disadvantages .The employers will know their employees better so they can choose qualified employees who fit perfectly into their work culture. Nowadays, there are software programs which can predict the character and intelligence of an employee based on their interests and hobbies. The employer with can assess the amount of risk involved in recruiting a particular person with this information. Personal information can be useful in several other ways. For example, I had an accident while I was coming back from my office and an onlooker called my office via my ID card. After that, my supervisor quickly informed my family.
On the other hand, some people believe that sharing private information with employers is of limited use and it feels like giving access to your personal life so it is an unreasonable demand and this information should not be asked by anybody. Based on personal experience, some employees especially females are stalked by their colleagues especially males who had access to their personal information. According to Dr. James Band, who is a psychologist in the University of Tehran, “people prefer to keep some information as a secret in their lives and they will be upset when their confidential information is disclosed.”
In conclusion, I firmly believe that giving private information to employers has its advantages and disadvantages; however, employers who request the information from their employees have a responsibility to ensure that this data is not misused or shared with a third party without the employees’ consent. In addition, personal information belonging to the employee should be only used for employees’ benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, third, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43804034582 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11522978746 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50144092219 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 123.036849466 49.4020404114 249% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 134.785714286 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7857142857 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274253667116 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112804308551 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610873871232 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192740382544 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489085261904 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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