It has been suggested that all young adults should be required to undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community Would the drawbacks of such a requirement be greater than the benefits to the community and the individual young adults

Essay topics:

It has been suggested that all young adults should be required to undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community.

Would the drawbacks of such a requirement be greater than the benefits to the community and the individual young adults?

As responsible citizens of a progressive society, there is often an expectation bound to all the young adults that they should get involved in unpaid work to assist people in their community. Although there are drawbacks to such activities, I would argue that these are outweighed by the benefits.

The drawbacks associated with this primarily include the time that a young adult would put in helping people. This time could very well be used in enhancing current skills, developing new skills, strengthening educational qualifications and then applying for competitive and high status jobs. Also, youth is that stage of life that allows enjoyment without being tied down with the responsibilities that arise with age. Spending the little leisure time that they get in helping the community would steal from them the pleasures of exploring their individuality.

On the other hand, providing unpaid help to people in the community also comes with significant advantages. The young adults of today become the leaders and innovators of tomorrow. If today they learn the value of moving forward while helping others move forward, they will understand what true progress and success means and that money is not everything. They will learn to empathize with each other, be sensitive to each other’s needs and make choices that benefit one and all. This in turn will also help communities prosper. With people being able to reach out to each other in cases of need, neighborhoods and cities could hopefully become become better places to live in, which is precisely what is needed in society today.

To sum up, overall I believe that the benefits are greater than the drawbacks. The requirement to undertake community service must be a key part of the life cycle of young adults and encouraged wherever possible.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (33 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: become
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, well, while, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16949152542 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75994662485 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603389830508 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5210337816 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.928571429 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340370656853 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109954162801 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765503572922 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214113896814 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708983529299 0.056905535591 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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