Many parents are unhappy with the amount of violence in video games TV programs and other leisure activities How harmful could this be to children What could be done to solve this problem

Essay topics:

Many parents are unhappy with the amount of violence in video games, TV programs and other leisure activities. How harmful could this be to children? What could be done to solve this problem?

Playing games, watching movies and other leisure activities are considered an instrument of sound mental and physical health. These activities is proliferating and gaining fame among all age of groups-from adolescent to adults. However many parents are unhappy with harmful consequences of violence in video games, TV Programs and other activities because of following reasons.

First of all, many parents claimed that violent video games are prone to children. They argue that such games put negative effects among the teenagers. Investigators discovered that people who played violent games for three consecutive days showed increase in aggressive behavior and hostile expectation each day they played. Playing violent games could be compared to cigarettes. A single cigarette won’t cause lung cancer, but smoking over week or months or years greatly increase the risk, in the same way, repeated exposure to violent games may have a cumulative impact on aggression.

Similarly, atrocious TV programs and other activities have the same predicament to the violent video games. Psychological research has showed three major effect of seeing violence on television. First, children become less sensitive to the pain or suffering to others. Second, they may be more fearful of the world around them. And last, they may be more likely to behave in aggressive or harmful way towards others. For example, in several studies, those who watched a violent program instead of a nonviolent one were slower to intervene or to call for the help when a little saw younger children fighting or playing destructively.

To solve this problem, strong measures should be taken both the society and the government. The government should take exemplary actions against such violent activities and should be make regulations to resist the extreme violence in leisure activities and if necessary it should be banned. At the same time, the parents should control over their sons and daughters to accustomed to violent programs.

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Average: 7.2 (13 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, similarly, so, for example, first of all, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45367412141 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77347946545 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603833865815 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7094625007 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.411764706 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4117647059 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.9879759519 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26760899928 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825560389053 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836299327549 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148034651513 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475594272107 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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