Nowadays families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this Explain the reasons for this and discuss any possible effects it may have on society

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Nowadays, families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this.
Explain the reasons for this and discuss any possible effects it may have on society.

Submitted by Nonororo on Sun, 06/18/2017 - 17:17

In the past, families used to be closer and more connected then they are today. People used to care more about keeping their family bonds strong, they used to share the changeable life events to gather whether in hard times or In good times. Therefore, maintaining this bond was one of the significant features in people’s life in the past.

In today’s materialistic world, people tend to be more and more preoccupied with their work in order to secure them selves financially. Thus, they spend most of their times at work. Moreover, the trend of personal development urge people to spend their free times in developing personal skills or doing work-related activities which leaves no time for families to be together.

Also, the technological invasion of our lives in forms of; TVS, radios, smart phones and internet definitley has a hand in weakening family ties, as it keep us rather distracted, isolated and stared on some screens. Online Social media websites as Facebook have played a part in changing the way of connecting between family members.

For instance; family members used to more often visit each other’s houses or contact with each other via phone calls. But with the presence of social media; sending messages to check on our relatives has become the most common way of communication that has helped people to get closer in the virtual world but be apart in the real world.

The advantages of this trend do not outweigh the disadvantages, because this trend results in many emotional and pschology problems in different age groups but the most influenced groups are children and older people who need the emotional support and attention. Furthermore, many psychological researches suggested that having a good relationship with family members could be one of the main cures for many psychological disorders such as anxiety disorder and chronic stress disorder.

To sum it up ,presently, the family life is suffering from disconnection between its members and having weaken family ties that both have become features of our modern world. Many findings encouraged people to spend quality times with their families to get support or prevent plenty of psychological disorders that may be caused by this unusual isolation and coldness in humans ‘social lives. As a practical solution for this disturbing trend, we must prioritise our times with our families.

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Average: 8.3 (6 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22622107969 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82020724472 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573264781491 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.5238345865 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.533333333 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224157624926 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769774263834 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422212241069 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115101095946 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568147077904 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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