People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent decades, human's living conditions are getting better, this leads to their life expectancy is rising. A large variety of people believe that labor aging should be lengthened, I agree partly with those who support this idea. In the following essay, I will present the reasons to demonstrate this opinion. 
On the one hand, there are two main factors why I believe that governments should exclude old people from the workforce. Firstly, the more elderly citizens stem from extending the life expectancy the more greying people require special treatments especially heart attacks, and diabetes, to effectively treated, this is because they are vulnerable to chronic diseases, which means states might have to devote a larger budget for healthcare. As a consequence, allocating authorities' funds for other services such as education, infrastructure, and environmental protection might be decreased. Secondly, elder citizens employ continuously for their enterprises give rise in increasing the unemployment rate of young labors who work in a similar field with older ones, resulting in an uncompetitive working environment where younger and qualified employees do not have opportunity to climb their career ladder due to senior people are still holding those positions. 
On the other hand, it is recommended to include holdup people in the labor pool since communities and authorities would reap certain benefits from such individuals. Initially, if they constantly serve their organizations, they can use their experiences to deliver knowledge and necessary skills to in-experience and junior employees. This not only tightens the sense of unity within their companies but also creates the high quality human resource for these enterprises. Secondly, the rise in the number of older people work for their firms results in decreasing the retirement labors rate who claim pension benefits, thus the heavy burden puts on governments maybe released.

In conclusion, or the reasons mentioned above, I believe that using elderly employees in the labor market should be taken into consideration by authorities and so these states need to enact suitable policies to encourage enterprises to exploit this workforce efficiently.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75223880597 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34051591199 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644776119403 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 20.2975951904 202% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 285.862729295 49.4020404114 579% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 240.875 106.682146367 226% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 41.875 20.7667163134 202% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.875 7.06120827912 225% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11481166242 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519730480428 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389546148979 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723846732888 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172859645153 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.6 13.0946893788 203% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 12.94 50.2224549098 26% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.6 11.3001002004 191% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.96 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.18 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.1190380762 182% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 10.7795591182 250% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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