People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the modern word, it is observed that owing to ever-increasing health consciousness of people; they live longer as compared to past. Although it is often argued that due to longer lifespan of people, they should continue to work, I totally agree with this view because this practice keeps them more happy and healthy even during later part of their life.

To begin with, one prominent advantage of continue to work longer during old age is that one could maintain his or her health in better way. In other words, roles and responsibilities at workplace make people engage in activities and this would make them physically and mentally fit. For an example, most of elder people, who are working for any company, are found healthier than the ordinary ones who are enjoying retirement life.

Additionally, it is an obvious fact that the cost of living of elder people is more as compared to adults because of additional expenditure of medicines, social responsibilities and many more. Moreover, if old age people continue to work, they may not be much dependent on others to enjoy their lives as per their own wishes. In other words, they can enjoy the freedom and do whatever they want to do that gives them immense pleasure and sense of satisfaction. For instance, people who still work in their 60s or 70s can enjoy their life because of their strong financial position.

In conclusion, while in current scenario people are able to live longer, I strongly believe that they should continue to work or engage in any activity which gives them more happiness and healthy life in their retirement lives too.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...nsciousness of people; they live longer as compared to past. Although it is often ...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... cost of living of elder people is more as compared to adults because of additiona...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92700729927 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65460965521 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554744525547 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.9606375078 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169490797477 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717818184047 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042237653124 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115617744052 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399981910663 0.056905535591 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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