People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country To what extent do you agree or disagree

Moving to or settling in a particular country is common in most parts of the world. However, it is argued that foreigners should to perform to the local traditions and customs. I do not completely oppose this idea but I am not really sure that forcing people to adapt it is true.
On the one hand, I believe that following the culture in the new countries, which the foreigners chose to live is perfectly reasonable. First, people will feel extremely difficult to adapt and integrate with a new life. When foreigners come to the countries where religion is first and every form of ritual is considered, it is unlikely that they will be respected by indigenous people if they do not follow these customs. Second, learning customs and traditions of the new living places can help people to avoid breaking the law of these nations. For example, in some parts of the world people can buy heavy weapons such as guns, grenades. But in Vietnam , these guns and grenades are considered illegal items, they are prohibited from trading.
On the other hand, it is a good idea that we should conserve our own personality, customs from the original country. This is strongly encouraged by the vast majority as a way of preserving and promoting their nation’s culture. In fact, it could be probable that the country we move to gain an understanding and take advantage of our traditions. Consequently, relationships between nations are highly advanced and the connection between people, communities is more and more sustainable.
In conclusion, although A refuge leaves a lot of things behind because of the changing in his living place, I believe that he should prepare himself to adapt himself to the new environment with its culture and traditions. This, in turn, helps him to cope with culture shock.

Votes
Average: 9.1 (12 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, really, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90789473684 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79078608386 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5141022355 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4666666667 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26411397562 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073070841931 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629328674057 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132186195777 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888505964735 0.056905535591 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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