People should work a fixed number of hours per week, and employers should not ask anybody to work more than this. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

People should work a fixed number of hours per week, and employers should not ask anybody to work more than this. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

In modern society, a growing number of people strive for a suitable livelihood to survive in this competitive world. However, it is argued that employers should work for a certain number of hours on weekdays and should not be requested to work extra hours. The following paragraphs will discuss the view and my perception.

It is reasonable to believe that employers should not request workers to work excessively. First of all, it is important to have a work-life balance. Employees, especially those scientific researchers and software developers, are likely to experience burn-out after the busy weekdays, and they are in desperate need of leisure activities to recharge their batteries. They will work ineffectually if asked to work more hours. Furthermore, asking staff to work for prolonged of time period also undermines their enthusiasms about the occupations, as it causes a drastic decline in their spare time.

on the other hand, some people believe that employees have obligation to work extra hours and also can benefit from it. Firstly, many blue-collar workers, such as firefighters or policemen, are required to deal with a variety of unexpected emergencies. Additionally, working extra time also contributes to promoting workers' understanding of the job descriptions and improve their capacity. For instance, as a technique engineer, working for extended hours enables them to familiarize with the painstaking procedures, thereby significantly enhancing their practical skills.

In my opinion, it is worth mentioning that employees are responsible for working extended hours since they sometimes have to cope with various pressing problems. However, employers are supposed to strike the balance between the working hours and free hours. Therefore, I agree the opinion in some ways.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...rastic decline in their spare time. on the other hand, some people believe tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55072463768 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06155775641 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590579710145 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.149386794 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.133333333 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287657867634 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101729385228 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845486882111 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181918722674 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527908911751 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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employees have obligation to work extra hours
employees have obligations to work extra hours

flaws:
No. of Words: 276 350 //maximum you will get 7.5 with 276 words in actual IELTS exam.

You may write 5 paragraphs instead of 4 paragraphs in order to give more content. and better to support or against one side in the introduction paragraph. Like this:

para 1: introduction. I agree/against one side here. suppose it is side A
para 2: some advantages/disadvantages of side B: first, .....Second....//like you did normally in other essays
para 3: However, i still support/against side A. one advantage/disadvantage of side A...
para 4: Moreover, another advantage/disadvantage of side A...
para 5: conclusion, so i agree/against side A

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 276 350
No. of Characters: 1486 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.076 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.384 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.958 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.681 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5