The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words
With modernization comes the globalization of restaurants that feed the majority of the worlds work driven population. Consequently, there is a staggering, disturbing rise in the rates of childhood obesity, especially in western countries. As today's children are the future of tomorrow, it's essential to discuss the reasons for and impacts of obesity.
Firstly, the flourishing restaurants negatively towards the plethora of overweight children. On average in the United States there is one fast food outlet within every 3km radius. This frequency combined with mesmerizing T.V commercials and busy adult work schedules, makes it immensely difficult for parents to prevent food low in nutritional value, from entering their child's meals. Secondly, children have become overly lazy. Bombarded by computer games and T.V shows, children spend less than 5% of their time on finishing their homework, let alone setting aside the to venture outside for exercise. Physical activity is being deemed unimportant, despite it's long term health benefits.
However, there are numerous adverse effects on children adapted to unhealthy eating habits. A balanced diet is crucial for longevity and the overall well being of a child, both of which are deprived once fast food is consumed on a regular basis. Doctors across the world are shocked to see 6 year old kids now dying of strokes and heart attacks, caused by cholesterol build ups. Junk food leaves the young tired and exhausted due to a lack of essential carbohydrates and proteins and so are unable to perform at their peak, whether it be education or sports.
In conclusion, the growing numbers of overweight kids are becoming a world wide epidemic. Our children are thus put under grave circumstances such as poor mental and physical health or even death.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32055749129 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82341785393 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.679442508711 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6608529277 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.8 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118580449374 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366372082978 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328773080201 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0658959500686 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253560836125 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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