Some people believe that children are given too much time. They feel that this time should be used to do more schoolwork. How do you think children should spent their free time?

Essay topics:

Some people believe that children are given too much time. They feel that this time should be used to do more schoolwork. How do you think children should spent their free time?

In the decades, children had more leisure time to do various activities such as playing games, walking in the parks and gossip with the others. But, now they have no free time due to the fact that this world becoming more competitive in terms of education. I believe that, children should allow using their free time rather than education and further elaboration are in the following paragraph.

To begin with, besides the academic curriculum, students should encourage to participate in building activities which will help them to understand and can improve their mental as well as physical growth. Childs can also enhance qualities like, sportsman spirit, leadership ability, and time management. In addition, students should also initiate with the social awareness program and engage student’s volunteers in participating in order to simulate social awareness and their responsibility among entire student community. Apparently, these activities facilitate to lay better foundation for our generation, in the same way, utilize their time in a fruitful way.

On the other hand, we can’t ignore that, school work which imparts from education is more important for every student in this competitive era. Students can secure a good future and get extremely great opportunities for their future by engaging in schoolwork rather than in leisure activities. Besides the education and schoolwork, it shapes the student’s personality and increases the knowledge with this habit. In some universities, students could not be admit without sound academic career. Therefore, among this, children should also spend their time for the schoolwork.

To draw the conclusion, it is consequential that children need to play overlooking the study in order to increase their basic knowledge. I deem that students should bestow some free time to use their creative mind for brighter future.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, look, so, therefore, well, in addition, such as, as well as, to begin with, in the same way, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53448275862 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92933216285 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606896551724 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2257025154 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.642857143 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1428571429 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327460173628 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122222497975 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971995690669 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221313120328 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975578436983 0.056905535591 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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