Some people feel that entertainers (e.g film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.Do you agree or disagree?Which other types of job should be highly paid?

Essay topics:

Some people feel that entertainers (e.g film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.

Do you agree or disagree?

Which other types of job should be highly paid?

Many people believe that Celebrities, Singers and Sportsperson are often paid above their work standards. In my opinion , Celebrities does put a lot of effort to earn their hard money while consideration needs to be given other varieties of the job because of their contribution to the economy.

Proponents who promote the idea that celebrities should be overpaid cite various evidences for doing this. Firstly producers and coach expect them to produce top-notch quality results on a consistent basis. Secondly, their daily schedule looks too hectic as compared to a common man. It may range from starting off their day with exercise, followed by practice sessions and the live performances either in a stadium or a theatre. In addition to this, they even attend promotional events. For instance, many well-known and famous person do a rigorous shift of 20-22 hours for a period of 3 months.

However, there are other types of job on which government and other top instiutions (e.g United Nation) need to do some groundwork to bring them to a standard in this highly inflated economy. Firstly, Teachers and Army officers should be recognized and well-paid because the former can facilitate a robust and strong foundation for our future generation and the latter protects our border while choose to sacrifice their life over us.

To conclude, Government and other top institutional bodies can try to reduce the income gap parity between celebrity stars and these people who have served the nation in the profession of a teacher and army for many decades

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...bove their work standards. In my opinion , Celebrities does put a lot of effort to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1305.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11764705882 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75875017257 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.674509803922 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8477514544 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.636363636 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1818181818 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9090909091 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17856509665 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571572127241 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532852313951 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103341578692 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531366220357 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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