Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think that it can be harmful for children.What are the advantages and disadvantages of children doing paid work?

Essay topics:

Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think that it can be harmful for children.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of children doing paid work?

Although paid work is thought by some to be a good experience for children, other people think that it can be detrimental. In my opinion, I consider that paid work can bring about more advantages for children compared to any problems it might bring.

Despite the drawbacks below, I believe the benefits gained by children doing work experience are extremely useful for their future. Firstly, children can develop an understanding of the value of money. This is a crucial lesson to learn as it teaches them not to waste money by realising the amount of work needed to earn it. Secondly, children take their first steps in learning how to save and manage money. Take many older children, for instance, who have a part time job in order to save up for something they would otherwise be unable to afford. Learning money management is an essential skill later in life when they earn salaries and have bills to pay.

Admittedly, there are some issues involved when children do paid work. One problem is that it might expose them to exploitation through slave labour. For example, in some developing countries children are made to work full time but due to their age are not protected by law. However, this situation is rare, only happening in certain countries. Another negative aspect is that the time children spend working could prevent them from focusing on their school work. Having a good education is the key to a successful future so if work interferes with their academic performance this can be a problem.

In conclusion, the critical lessons that children can learn when they work for money will stand them in good stead when they are adults and clearly outweigh any disadvantages.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 461, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...lder children, for instance, who have a part time job in order to save up for something t...
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Line 13, column 219, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ing countries children are made to work full time but due to their age are not protected ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94097222222 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58821969176 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1561860247 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8666666667 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.447744887925 0.244688304435 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157314980156 0.084324248473 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136986239802 0.0667982634062 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290506695086 0.151304729494 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131695864732 0.056905535591 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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