Today people buy things that they do not need because of advertisement. how far do you agree?

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Today people buy things that they do not need because of advertisement. how far do you agree?

Today, the advertisement has been at the center of global debates. It draws myriad customer`s attention to the products which are not handy for them by attractive methods. Although we cannot debunk the merits of advertisements in choosing the best products we need, but it is true that it promotes customers to purchase numerous goods which they do not actually need. This will be proven in this essay by showing how advertisement can negatively effect on children as well as adults.
Firstly, children inevitably exposed to these promotions. As they are not yet wise enough to distinguish the advertisement frauds, they start nagging in order to relent the parents to buy dazzling toys. Benten toys are salient examples. They widely advertise these toys, targeting the young due to the monetary status. As the toys update every month, parents have to frequently purchase the new one. Thus, this is obvious how advertisement lead customers buy useless products.
Not surprisingly, all division of society targeted by advertisement. The best way to reach this goal is media, as million of people devote their time, watching television regardless of age. It depicts new products which people have been never thought about them before. In this situation, it seems handy and attractive. Take some sort of make-up stuff as an example. Consequently, attractively introducing the new products make consumers buying them.
After looking above point, it is clear that promotional strategies target all member of society due to financial purpose. Customers purchase many products which they do not need , however, it is because of the negative ramification of advertisements.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, thus, well, sort of, as well as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35227272727 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00128369355 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632575757576 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3118663956 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.5 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6666666667 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186134120593 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467813949108 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570273777544 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106449264985 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287745748372 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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