Trying to save endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable resources Do you agree or disagree Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiences

Essay topics:

Trying to save endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable resources.
Do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiences.

Under a situation of finitude sources whether should we save endangered species or not present a dilemma lesson for the modern human. Many people may question why spend money and put effort to save them? Even cite extinction is part of natural order, what make them special to be saved since countless species have come and gone. The following essay I will target on some of the reasons why they deserve to be saved.

First, although distinction does occur naturally, unfortunately, the accelerating decline of our wild animals less and less results in natural events. Most of the dangers to wildlife are from habitat loss and degradation, environment pollution, the introduction of exotic (non-native) organisms, and overexploitation; all generally a direct result of human activities.

Second, conserve endangered species is not an entirely costly business but maybe a profitable action of humankind. Shark is one of the notorious endangered species. Nevertheless, according to the recent scientific research carries out, the brain of shark may have constituent which can help human from mental deteriorating, and the venom of snakes has also been researched in medical fields. Protect and conserve a diversity of natural is also value for human activities such as education, recreation and the most important is that it balanced the biological chain which is important for an ecosystem.

Yet, the strongest argument of persevering endangered species is that all species has its intrinsic value to exit. Furthermore, since we are the only beings who have evolved by natural selection that led to possesses the ability to save the others, shouldn't we proud of this and exert the gift to protect the others?

In conclusion, even if saving endangered species has no readily goodness to us, does not mean it is not related to the whole planet's biological system. It is worthwhile to adopt this kind of action to prevent unforeseen loss.

Any suggestions are welcome. Please help me out. This is my first time to prepare IELTS essay writing, I'm afraid I misunderstood the meaning of the topic, especially I'm confused when should refer to both side, and when should refer to only one side.

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Average: 9.5 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun results is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'valued'.
Suggestion: valued
...conserve a diversity of natural is also value for human activities such as education,...
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'possess'.
Suggestion: possess
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17696629213 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89895669909 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609550561798 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1091710303 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.411764706 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9411764706 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133982396863 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040041008544 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280183817321 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0596932468891 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285651057816 0.056905535591 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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