We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Some people argue that it is impossible to help everyone in the world so we should overcome our own challenges. To certain extent, I agree that we should try to focus on our community problems. However, I also believe that, there are people who are under substandard condition in other countries and need any help from us.
On the one hand, I accept that it is essential to protect our people .That is fact, there are plenty needy people around us. They cannot able to overcome their problems. For instance, giving money, food or clothes might be great aid to support them. As a result, these people can be jumpy and relieve stress. If we did not help those people, they would be feel sick and chose some wrong way to solve their issues.
On the other hand, I believe that governments and wealthy nations should helpful to other countries. There are deeper problems which face other countries. They cannot afford to deal with. For example Syria and other countries suffer from terrorism and global organizations, and developed countries can donate something to overtake it. In this way other countries can maintain problems and obstacle terrorism. If developed countries did not help those countries, this could lead to spread terrorism all over the world.
In conclusion, although it is understandable to help our community, I also believe that helping other countries can bring stability over the world. People can feel safe and happy.

Votes
Average: 6.6 (28 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1202.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 243.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94650205761 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54249726988 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56378600823 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 360.9 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7733238061 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.125 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1875 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27853639977 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902964952145 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854257104446 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170563009367 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910179170675 0.056905535591 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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