You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks Which country would you like to visit Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice

Essay topics:

You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks.
Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details
to explain your choice.

A lot of people love to travel new countries or regions. I personally like travelling and if I have the Chance to travel overseas for two weeks. I would like to visit China, which is located in the northern part of Asia region. In this essay, I will portray in details the reason, why I choose China as my main destination point.

To begin with, it is a fact that China is well known for its civilisation and there are lots of historical places that I must visit. Predominantly, I would like to visit the Great Wall of China, which is included in the seven wonders of the world. It was the longest wall that was ever made by human being. Many tourist traveled to China, to see that wall and it was said that astronauts could see the wall with a naked eye from the shuttle space ship. Moreover, I will visit the Tian An Men Square, which is located in the capital city of China, Beijing. The square is a place, where most of the Emperor of China had lived until the communist party took over the country in 1960. There are ancient buildings contain lots of historical values, therefore I must visit these places.

Besides the historical places, there are other things that visitors could do in China. There are lots of beautiful landscapes in the country, such as mountains, hills and valleys, which are well known for their purity and originality. Apart from this, China is well known as its unique and exotic animal, Panda. Panda is a part of bear family, but the animal has unique in a colour and it can only be found in China.

To recapitulate, if I have the opportunity to visit a new country for fourteen days, I would definitely visit China. There are lots of things that visitors could do such as visiting the historical places, and seeing the animals and beautiful landscapes of the country.

Votes
Average: 5.7 (7 votes)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, apart from, as for, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53211009174 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44433009232 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504587155963 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2415434261 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.1764705882 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218422087854 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782445541312 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854581876746 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158817803054 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0885855502389 0.056905535591 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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