You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?Give reasons for your answe

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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Today, a lot of awareness towards society or religions is required within each and every person. Nowadays, media has become the major source of awareness. Famous personalities like film stars or sports personalities who are part of media can make people aware of various situations like problems in outside world or motivate the talented youth.

Each and every person always try to imitate the famous celebrity. For instance, considering a famous tennis player, Sania Mirza. She won multiple awards not only at national level but at international level too which emboldened people more towards tennis. In ancient times, when people wanted to kill their daughter, today, everyone wanted their children to be a tennis player and enhance the value of their nation worldwide.

A famous celebrity also helped people in learning their profession. Like, the famous personality, Milkha Singh also known as flying Sikh have opened an academy using his reward money. His achievements inspired and helped people to learn more about running skills. This leads to skill enhancement of youth from beginner to advanced and made them versatile.
In contrast to benefits, there are certain problems too. Being a celebrity and having glamorous life always keep them highlighted in the eyes of terrorists. While having ample money, they get multiple ransom calls, which can eventually put them into egregious issues. But today, everyone has risks in their life. So development or growth of talented youth and nation is somewhere crucial than any other issue.

To conclude, awareness is necessary for the development of a nation. Efforts of one can help or develop many. Dedication and hard work of youth can make them a famous celebrity which eventually uplift nation because genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration

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Average: 8.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
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Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
... value of their nation worldwide. A famous celebrity also helped people in learning their pr...
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Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
... and hard work of youth can make them a famous celebrity which eventually uplift nation because ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'so', 'while', 'for instance', 'in contrast', 'in contrast to']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.298136645963 0.247107183377 121% => OK
Verbs: 0.155279503106 0.155533422707 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0900621118012 0.0946595960268 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0372670807453 0.0501214627716 74% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0403726708075 0.0437548338989 92% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0993788819876 0.122226691241 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0527950310559 0.0403226058552 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67276749606 2.80594681477 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0248447204969 0.0326793684256 76% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0652173913043 0.0861772015684 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0124223602484 0.021408717616 58% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0155279503106 0.011925033212 130% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1837.0 1933.35771543 95% => OK
No of words: 290.0 316.048096192 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.33448275862 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.441379310345 0.374742101984 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272413793103 0.28420135186 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.193103448276 0.203846283523 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134482758621 0.137316102897 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67276749606 2.80594681477 95% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.037074148 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627586206897 0.56093040696 112% => OK
Word variations: 71.8024152644 60.7387585426 118% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0891783567 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.2631578947 20.7743622355 73% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0237324188 49.517814964 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6842105263 127.492653851 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2631578947 20.7743622355 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.421052631579 0.814263465372 52% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 42.5045372051 49.1944974215 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.93333333333 1.69124875643 114% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12360796293 0.332605444948 37% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.08639898702 0.102741220458 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0618371414209 0.0668466124924 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.461108903122 0.534860350844 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.124008847992 0.148594505496 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416471401965 0.134430193775 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310445903173 0.0742795772207 42% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.182792357474 0.324371583561 56% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0443554243339 0.0638462369009 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0719679069179 0.228012699653 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202621920738 0.058150111329 35% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.41683366733 205% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.