In spite of some solid barriers, what shapes a country is a combination of culture, needs, desires and hobbies, which by developing mass media are much more revealed to anyone even those who belong to another countries. One critical tool of media is advertisement, which can provide us with people’s need on one hand and on the other hand what leaders want for their people, so in my opinion advertisement can draw a big picture of a country. Below are details that can elaborate my point.
To begin with, people have various needs and desires which range from basic products such as food and cloths to luxury products like expensive cars. Advertisements aim at these needs to increase their sale and make more revenue. So it could be said that advertisment elicits from what people want to have and consume. when we consider the bigger picture, somehow, advertisment can show us the trades and directions which a socity is going through. For an instanse, about 3 decades ago, the only advertisments which we could find in TV or newspaper were around basic products that any person will be willing to have. However, today, with better economical conditions people can afford more expensive products which go beyond basic needs, such as entertainment and jewellry. In one word, advertisment is the reflection of socity's desire and circumstances.
Furthermore, nowadays, advertisment is one of the biggest industries in the world, which is running by the owner of new inovations, products and services. These owners are fiercly struggling to be the pioneer in specifc markets in which they will be able to control customers and change their life styles. For example, Apple company made a huge change in people's lives, it made them enthusiastic about technology and electronic devices, so that everybody can say that United States is a country where people like technology. Undoubtedly, there are lots of new ideas and products that generate everyday, but only those will survive which will be introduced by advertisment. Actually, those are the ones that shapes new needs and passion among people and convince them to be their loyal followers. simply put, advertismet can alter a country by supplying it with new products.
All toghter, advertisment is a powerfull tool that can use current needs of people to provide them with things that might satisfy them as well as that by introducing new products which can change their life styles, meanwhile, in both case, one can see the socity's general sprit.
, which by developing mass media are much more revealed to anyone even those
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who belong to another countries.
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the ones that shapes new needs
the ones that shape new needs
to provide them with things that might satisfy them as well as that by introducing new products which can change their life styles,
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Sentence: So it could be said that advertisment elicits from what people want to have and consume. when we consider the bigger picture, somehow, advertisment can show us the trades and directions which a socity is going through.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
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Sentence: For an instanse, about 3 decades ago, the only advertisments which we could find in TV or newspaper were around basic products that any person will be willing to have.
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Error: advertisments Suggestion: advertisements
Sentence: However, today, with better economical conditions people can afford more expensive products which go beyond basic needs, such as entertainment and jewellry.
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Sentence: In one word, advertisment is the reflection of socity's desire and circumstances.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: Furthermore, nowadays, advertisment is one of the biggest industries in the world, which is running by the owner of new inovations, products and services.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Error: inovations Suggestion: innovations
Sentence: These owners are fiercly struggling to be the pioneer in specifc markets in which they will be able to control customers and change their life styles.
Error: fiercly Suggestion: fiercely
Error: specifc Suggestion: specific
Sentence: Undoubtedly, there are lots of new ideas and products that generate everyday, but only those will survive which will be introduced by advertisment.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: Actually, those are the ones that shapes new needs and passion among people and convince them to be their loyal followers. simply put, advertismet can alter a country by supplying it with new products.
Error: advertismet Suggestion: advertise
Sentence: All toghter, advertisment is a powerfull tool that can use current needs of people to provide them with things that might satisfy them as well as that by introducing new products which can change their life styles, meanwhile, in both case, one can see the socity's general sprit.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Error: powerfull Suggestion: powerful
Error: toghter Suggestion: tighter
Error: sprit Suggestion: No alternate word
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