Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The invention of the Internet has had negative effects on your civilization. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Nowadays, it is hard to imagine life without the Internet. We spend most of our daily time online and it make us to be more dependent to the Internet. Also, as other tools, it has many advantages and disadvantages which we should consider thoroughly. The internet facilitates the flow of information between people and had a significant impact on people's awareness. Furthermore, it has an effective role in improving quality of education. In contrast, the Internet threats our social and culture in some ways. Gradually, it become a tool which is popular among terrorists, abusers, and thieves. In addition, the Internet has a major influence on families fragmentation. The basis of my opinion will be discussed as follow.
First, the Internet is a place that we can find many unethical materials in it. Ignoring dark web, which is very dangerous place, all of the users can access to the unethical contents like porn, abusive videos and the information which is restricted to be publish in public. Every young internet user (e.g. under 18 years old) can access to the porn movies and most of them are addicted to watch sexual intercourse that are inappropriate to them. It become more dangerous when some teachers confessed that students knows almost all of the porn stars and have a little information about famous poets and writers like Kafka, Doma, etc. So, internet is very destructive by spreading the sexual and unethical contexts.
Second, Internet is becoming very popular among terrorists such as ISIS, Al-Qaeda and FARC. They use internet to suicide, find members to join their group and plan of terrorist operations. It has reported that terrorist groups recruited some psychology and computer specialists that were commissioned to find victims by searching in the internet and talk with them through Skype and social networks. For instance, most of the ISIS members, which arrested by Iranian security guards, confessed that they convinced to join ISIS through the Internet. Also, terrorist groups usually plan their terrorist operations through internet. The latest example of this is occurred in Istanbul, Turkey, which the terrorist, who killed more that 30 people in a club, gets order from the top member through social networks. So, internet is becoming a threat to the social security and civilizations by terrorist operations, spreading fear among the citizens, etc.
Finally, internet and social networks are very effective in increasing rate of divorce among countries like Iran. Researchers indicated that most of the people, who their wife or husband cheated to them, stated that social networks such as Telegram, What'sApp, Facebook and Twitter as the main reason of their divorce. They stated that their partners start to cheat to them by establishing a romance relationship with others in such networks. Furthermore, some of the people believed that their partners are spending most of their in social networks and playing games instead of spending time along them. So, overusing internet is very harmful to society and culture. It caused many couples divorced.
In conclusion, although internet is a very useful tool to improve our civilization's quality of life, misusing it may has severe negative effects on families, culture and even, humanity. In general, internet is becoming a dangerous tool with a lot of threats to children and families. If we want to have a good life in a healthy society, we should use advertising to trigger people to use the internet efficiently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, e.g., finally, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2947.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1975308642 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7969957528 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490299823633 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 918.0 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3549051936 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2333333333 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53333333333 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 3.85842293907 441% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126801994816 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370051231708 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267963885567 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0768594560921 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038200686679 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 86.8835125448 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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