Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history news about events happening around the world has played prominent role in all decision-makers and governors. Due to its paramount importance nowadays there are a lot new agencies which works under control of governments or provides new privately. A controversial question which often raised regarding the importance of new is that even though the majority of people support this idea, some people may hold the view that they need to know only the events that they will affect their daily life. In my perspective I firmly believe that it is important to know events happening around the world for a few reasons. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that history will repeat. This a strong fact which a lot of historians supports and give a many reason to approve it. For example, I remember from a historical book about ancient emperors of china that one of the daily works of kings was getting information all around the world and because of that during the history they were able to make best decisions in different situation. Also, based on the same book, there were a reference library which all of their decisions and commands were documented for using of next generation. The provided facts by this book clearly illustrates the importance of knowing news of around the world.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that knowing the events happening in different places will sophisticate people and has significant and undeniable role in one's success and happiness. My friend's experience as a professional soccer player is a compelling example of this. He was a successful player in my country and when someone asked about reasons of his success, his answer was knowing the news about famous players around the world. For example, he learned from big players such as Messi that Money always is not reason for singing a contract and changing the team. He knew that a lot of successful players choose their team based on various criteria and considering that he was pursuing the news of them he was able to use their experience and make best decision during changing his team. This example shows that we can use others experience if we know their decisions.
In conclusion, even though a lot of events happening around the world have not direct affect on our life, knowing about them will provide opportunity of using them to make best decision in different situation. Consequently, it is highly recommended that people choose a worldwide and reliable news agency such as Times, BBC, ... and read daily news to know what happen around the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
...a lot of historians supports and give a many reason to approve it. For example, I remember ...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... has significant and undeniable role in ones success and happiness. My friends exper...
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Message: The verb know is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'knew'
Suggestion: knew
...bout reasons of his success, his answer was knowing the news about famous players around th...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...bout reasons of his success, his answer was knowing the news about famous players around th...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'make the best'.
Suggestion: make the best
...he was able to use their experience and make best decision during changing his team. This...
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...pening around the world have not direct affect on our life, knowing about them will provi...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'make the best'.
Suggestion: make the best
...ll provide opportunity of using them to make best decision in different situation. Conseq...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, may, regarding, so, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95535714286 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66653542236 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482142857143 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2568831484 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.842105263 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5789473684 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281744687161 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920521279634 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070669768153 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189632263925 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641040427751 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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