Education has become a popular culture in today's societies, and hence individuals need to be educated. As a result of this trend, parents have become more involved in their children education to ensure the future of their offspring's. So, I agree that parents are more involved because they have more concerns about their children future than past and society also expect them to do so.
First, parents are more concerned about their child future. Contrary to a couple of decades ago, finding a job without having enough education has become more difficult thus, parents try their best to ensure their children have an adequate education. As an example, consider parents in the past that need workers on their farm. They did not pay attention to their children education as long as their children finish farm works. However, in our era, parents ensure that their children deeds in the home is not harm children education.
Second, society is demanding parents be aware of their children's education. For example, there are rules in each country that if parents do not pay attention to their child education, there would be severe consequences imposed by local and national governments. For instance, I had a classmate whose parents did not come to school to know their child progress for a while, then the manager asks his parents to come with a legal invitation. In addition, the manager notified the social service which results in a whole investigation of his parents and their capability to hold the child.
Overall, parents are more concern about their children's education either because of their self-motivation to raise a successful child or because of society that wants educated and powerful individuals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "wants educated" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'educating' or 'to be educated'.
Suggestion: educating; to be educated
...or because of society demand that wants educated and powerful individuals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, second, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1446.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 282.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12765957447 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63766865066 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517730496454 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.193545843 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.230769231 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84615384615 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413049241897 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174170407396 0.076458572812 228% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656879728922 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272032068518 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719193485396 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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