Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
The modern world is the world of constant modernisations and inventions. If a person wants to excel in life, he/she has to adapt quickly to the fast changing circumstances. The person needs to stay healthy and have certain pivotal skills. It is great if young people have a chance to learn how to deal with the stress and develop their social skills while studying in a university. Therefore, I strongly believe that universities should contribute money to the spots activities in the same degree than they spend to their libraries.
First of all, sport helps students to maintain their health. Sports activities let students relieve the stress they face during the process of education. For example, while being a student of a pharmacy school, I had to spend a tremendous amount of hours in a class and sometimes spend nights with the books. This harsh pace of educational process did not contribute to my wellbeing, indeed, quite often I felt stressed out. The only way to relieve that stress was participating in a sports activity such as volleyball. I recall, that I always had a great time during the games. I was jocking around with my teammates while playing, and through that discharged the psychological tension. Moreover, I made my muscles work, which helped me to avoid back pain, the problem the majority of the students deal with when continuously studying. To that end, the volleyball games were indispensable for me to keep up with the learning process and stay in shape.
Secondly, taking part in a groop sports activities let the students evolve their communication skills. Having the capability to socialize easily is incredibly important for the young people to succeed. This is because nowadays the business setting based on the teem work. My own experience is a good example of that. As I said above, I was in the university`s volleyball teem and developing the relationships with my teammates taught me how to work in a groop and how to adapt to different stile of people`s behavior. In a result, when I started working in a pharmacy, I have never had problems in communication with my coworkers, which made the work process effective and enjoyable. So, the participating in the groop sports activity, supported by my pharmacy school, helped me to obtain the ability to socialize quickly.
To conclude, I think that universities have to fund sports activities for the students equally with the maintaining their libraries. The reasons for that are that sport is a great tool for the students to reduce their stress and increase their chances to fast adaptation in the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 484, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...ieve that stress was participating in a sports activity such as volleyball. I recall, ...
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... nowadays the business setting based on the teem work. My own experience is a good examp...
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Line 4, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nces to fast adaptation in the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98627002288 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94705926716 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496567505721 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4844949199 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7391304348 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236600529551 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667206828479 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774830428982 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162227158966 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055228699289 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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