Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.

As humans living in a civilized society, the issue of employment and finding job considers as the momentous consideration for the people. There are lots of factors such as a proliferated education, and the skill of interaction with people. The importance of each of those factors leads to controversial outlooks among the people. While some people may hold the view that an extroverted individual in more successful in his or her future job; however, others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that the good educational background is more crucial. I personally agree with the second belief. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons which persuade me to put forward this perspective.

The first exquisite reason which gives the adherence to my perspective is that the occupations of modern society require the professional knowledge. It is lucidly obvious that nowadays the jobs are specialized, which demand a sophisticated educational background, to be capable of handling it. In this condition, the knowledge of employees who apply for the job considers as the main point of examination and admission. A vivid example can be given to shed a light on the issue is my brother's instance. He and his friend are graduated from one of the prestige University of Iran. As my brother possesses the chasm information about his field of study and he is laconic; in contrast, his friend has a great skill of communication with surrounding with an average intelligence about his major. After their graduation, my brother employed in one of the professional company related to his major with a high salary. On the other hand, his friend worked in a social service company which does have no links with his education.

The next case embraced my idea is that the whole jobs do not require the social interaction. In a circumstance, which the worker has to present his or her function without the interaction with the people; the skill of good relationship with people is abortive. In addition, the connection with surrounding is disruptive; inasmuch as, it disturbs the individual’s concentration on his or her main task. According to noteworthy, intelligence survey conducted in my country, approximately sixty percent of careers in Iran do not demand the social interaction with the people. Besides, based on another important, cogent static released by my country, nearly sixty-nine percent of distractions occurs in the period which a worker communicate with his or her co-worker. For the sake of these two survey and static, it is explicit as a crystal that the social relation is not as fundament as the good education.

To wrap it up, based on the all aforementioned reasons mentioned above, one can logically draw the conclusion that the deep-rooted knowledge in more important than the decent communication with the people; since, current jobs are specialized and whole careers do not demand the social interaction. All in all, I firmly recommend that to enhance the chance of finding a job in the future, it is a wise idea to focus on the education rather than the social interaction ability.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 752, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'average intelligence'.
Suggestion: average intelligence
... of communication with surrounding with an average intelligence about his major. After their graduation...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'while', 'as to', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'such as', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236842105263 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.119298245614 0.158761421928 75% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101754385965 0.0866891130778 117% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0315789473684 0.046263068375 68% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0614035087719 0.0685040099705 90% => OK
Prepositions: 0.147368421053 0.118717715034 124% => OK
Participles: 0.0298245614035 0.0351676179071 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.10060061866 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.019298245614 0.0309702414327 62% => OK
Particles: 0.00175438596491 0.00188951952338 93% => OK
Determiners: 0.135087719298 0.0887237588012 152% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00877192982456 0.0209618222197 42% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0122807017544 0.0139019557991 88% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3146.0 2387.08602151 132% => OK
No of words: 515.0 408.028673835 126% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10873786408 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.366990291262 0.338922669872 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.293203883495 0.251872472559 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.211650485437 0.174417080927 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.166990291262 0.112833075102 148% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10060061866 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499029126214 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 59.1600159213 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.4090909091 20.5533526081 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6111982599 48.84282405 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.0 120.699889404 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4090909091 20.5533526081 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.636363636364 0.644075263715 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 52.7294792586 45.7405998639 115% => OK
Elegance: 1.95041322314 1.45489161554 134% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411832652143 0.300154397459 137% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123751097813 0.103427244359 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0814398655557 0.0752933317313 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.559271345442 0.497263757937 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128480949889 0.151897553556 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180330470995 0.114077575197 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774895360239 0.0781384742642 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.563886601299 0.336927656856 167% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0136069870134 0.067059652881 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332837217951 0.210909579961 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529892195723 0.0618886996521 86% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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