Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every single one of us at one point will certainly need to choose a job. It is in fact, one the most inticate and important choices that one has to make. Not only will it determine how much wealth a person earns but also is influential in the rest of his/her life. In my view, it is more expedient for children to opt a career that is similiar to what their parents had done. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in following essay.
To begin with, through years of time they spend being involved in a job or having the same responsiblity, parents have acuired a great deal of valuable experience and knowledge. To be more specific, their expertise which is crucial for their children progress in their career, can be readily transferred to them. For instance, my father worked at several newspapers for 20 years.From being a freelance writer to taking the huge burden of being a chief editor of a renowned journal, He served in various capacities. As a result, he had gained an accumulated know-how that was second to none in his own field. He was nominated for numerous awards in journalism and was declared the best editor of a newspaper in our country for two consequitive years. When I finished college, I decided to pursue what my father did. Having him alongside me and learning all the nuances of the art of writing articles allowed me to be employed by one the most prestigious news organizations active where I live and distinguishing myself among my colleagues.
Secondly, In addition to experience, over the years of working in a job, people establish a set of relationships or rapport which their offsprings can easily get connected to. This, in turn, will save them time that otherwise was needed to build these connections while enabling them to allocate their most precious resource to things more. An experience of my uncle is a good example of this. When he began to work in his father's real estate office, he barely knew anyone in the industry. Therefore, it was extremely difficult for him or any other newcomer for that matter, to earn the trust of investors so as to borrow some money for initiating a new construction project. Nonetheless, since his father was an eminent builder with whom many had financial dealings, he soon manged to use his father perfect credit rating, and getting a large sum of money as loans for starting a series of apartments in the suburbs. This venture turned out to be a massive success, earning him a lot of reputation and profits.
In conclusion, I think that it is crucial children be allowed to choose a job that is similar to their parent's.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 380, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: From
...rked at several newspapers for 20 years.From being a freelance writer to taking the ...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... matter, to earn the trust of investors so as to borrow some money for initiating a new ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67818574514 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7356596919 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578833693305 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2561286861 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.3 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.15 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185390043183 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567929742099 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685657228875 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151884097596 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711271931471 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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