Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
From the dawn of humanity, young people choose someone to be their role model in life. With this is mind, a fierce controversy exists as to whether or not celebrities are more important to younger people than the older ones. As far as I am concerned, it is crystal clear that celebrities plays a significant rule in young-aged people for some pivotal reasons, two of which are of great importance in comparison to others, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, older people are less likely to follow any "herd-mentality", although some celebrities can have some good opinions about several subjects, it is more prevalent that they will have less knowledge for many subjects to have a correct opinion. On the other hand, the younger people usually admire a celebrity too much that they follow any opinion they give in any field, sometimes not even related to their knowledge or talent. Additionally, they look up to the celebrities they like because they want to be like them, as the celebrities are famous, wealthy, and beautiful to the young society. For example, when a political election is ahead, politicians try to get well-known celebrities to back up them so that the younger fans of this particular celebrity will vote to this politician too. Statistics demonstrate that when a politician have the support of a celebrity -- that is -- a very famous one, substantially have more chance to won the election.
Hence, the younger people seem to follow their opinions in various types of events.
Secondly, the youth have far less information about the things that are occurring around them. Therefore, it is possible, not knowing the essential information about the subject, they just follow the opinion of the celebrity blindly. In contrast, the old ones have more experiences through their lives and are far-sighted, well-read people who cannot blindly stands to the idea that are not based on their knowledge, so much so that they will follow a celebrity just for his or her talent rather than their opinions.
To sum up, by taking into account all the above mentioned factors, we reach the conclusion that celebrities, to be more specific: their opinions, are more important to the younger age of the society as compared to the old ones. I strongly hope that the celebrities not take this opportunity for granted and will share "only" their strong opinions to their fans so that they would choose promptly too.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: WHETHER[4]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
...is is mind, a fierce controversy exists as to whether or not celebrities are more important to young...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in contrast, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05651105651 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9597705568 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5085995086 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.9876618502 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.0 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0714285714 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195609812708 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808506821888 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545685042555 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12157143604 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254966031535 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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