Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
In these days there has been much controversy about impact of the famous people on younger and caused quite a stir in numerous circles and camps. Different people may give various type of response to this question based on their cultural, familiar, and even social background. Although majority of people contemplate that elder admire and care about well –known people’ perspective like adult, other posits that youth have exposed to famous’ viewpoint in modern days rather than adults . However, when it comes to me I conspicuously declare that our generation pays attention to famous people’ notion much more than our parents or ancestor on account of the following reason.
To begin with, there is an undeniable fact that celebrities, athletes, entertainer are more involves in the community thanks to social media existence. Indeed, our generation quite is aware of every aspect of celebrities’ lifestyle and thinking because of the exploded Internet information, Facebook, Telegram channel, Instagram,… the more you get involved in aristocracy’s life, the more impressed you are with their opinion and lifestyle. In contrast, last generation had not accessed these social media and as a result celebrities’ opinion. Consequently, they were not influenced by celebrities’ contemplation.
Second, with the development of technology and inclination to luctury, healthy and amusing life, and contributing the celebrities in commercial advertising, younger are more impacted in famous people notion. Another way to put it is, younger are not matured enough to discriminate the good and bad as well they also need a model to imitate his or her trend such as the outfit,… . There for they take the celebrities as a reference for their exercise or fashion and imitate them. On the other hand, old people, because of their age, take the advertisement scandal and do not pay attention to them.
To put it in a nutshell, I restate that, a growing body of paragraph support this inevitable fact that younger are more tilted towards famous’ opinions compared with older. Back to beginning controversial question I cite a quite bias in favor of this indisputable fact that consequence of social media and advertisement in our modern day make the celebrities’ role bold and not surprising younger tend to mimic them more than the past generation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, second, so, well, even so, in contrast, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41018766756 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26369933256 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573726541555 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7200910232 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.142857143 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6428571429 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281677534951 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881692474093 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472039776989 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154924986314 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0081484809055 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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