Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that since the dawn of civilization, human being has played a prevailing roll in all societies.It can change the course of history.Perhaps the most important milepost of 20th and 21st century is people and the most controversial part of this issue is young mankind.The inevitable question which has always engendered heated debate among academicians is whether adult people give adequate time to helping their communities or not.Therefore a plethora of people are the leading proponents of the claim that a young person spends abundant time for developing of his society whereas others hold exact opposite perspective and believe that adult people don't have any effect on their communities.I am, nonetheless to the latter, inclined toward the opinion that people especially the young ones give ample time to assisting their countries.To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs will aptly elucidate a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that people who continue their education in the university have a significant effect on the country.After the end of education, an Adult person has enough skills for practical and theoretical jobs.They can accelerate the circle of industry, agriculture, economic etc.Some of them work in a factory while others do jobs and investigations in hospital.By and large, most young people that graduated from universities give much time not only to making better of circumstances of their life but also to developing of their communities.The noteworthy statistic, revealed by a recent social research conducted in our country show that approximately 90 percent of people who work in factory, hospital, court etc. are between 22 until 35 ages.In the result of this result, young human(educated ones) work better than other people and have more effect on society.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that apart from educated people, abundant young persons have free jobs-works don't need any courses in university-and help society achieve more progress.Take a personal experience as an example; when I was a young, i went to a pottery and got some experience for this work.I made potteries and sold some of them, in turn, I helped my society by preparing some apparatuses like clay dishes.Young people, nowaday, collaborate with each other in free jobs to boost the level of improvement in their society.
To recapitulate, all the enumerated reasons converge to the point that preparing opportunity for young people should aim for society with higher priority than other issues.However, that was a story in a nutshell; actually,there are some other reasons and examples, challenging the claim, which are not mentioned above.Finally, it is suggested that a survey is conducted to find out whether people have experienced valuable results by taking more attention to young people or not.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, nonetheless, so, therefore, whereas, while, apart from, in fact, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2471.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39519650655 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13995131403 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565502183406 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 781.2 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 91.0 20.1344086022 452% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 280.488573742 48.9658058833 573% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 494.2 100.406767564 492% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 91.6 20.6045352989 445% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 28.0 5.45110844103 514% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 5.5376344086 470% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221171900895 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11237542317 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465968242636 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128873971359 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344982102973 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 49.8 11.7677419355 423% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -29.35 58.1214874552 -50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 6.10430107527 316% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 40.0 10.1575268817 394% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.22 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.53 8.01818996416 156% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 61.0 10.002688172 610% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 38.4 10.0537634409 382% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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