Do you agree or disagree:
“It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.”
It goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world where people are putting all of their efforts so as to find a suitable job guaranteeing their future life, taking the on-counter alternatives into account would be almost a rational task. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that children should find a thoroughly new job differing from their parents' whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, it will be extremely profitable for children to continue their parents' careers. In the ensuing paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that since they spend a noticeable period of their childhood beside their parents, it is obvious that they will become familiar with their job. Therefore, they have much more time in order to adapt themselves to the job which is going to be the source of their income in future life. Moreover, it is of great possibility that they gain a host of experiences because they can help their parents in their leisure time. They can even grasp some experiences by just looking at their parents’ working. These experiences would definitely help them develop with an incredibly growing pace.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that people would get fame if they go on their ancestors’ career. To clarify, take the example of an extended family in which the father's job is identical to the grandfather's and the boy has decided to continue his father's job. People living nearby who knew the grandfather will be informed of the fact that this job has a hereditary characteristic. Hence, the great family is going to be famous for that particular job as it passes from one generation to another. It could be unfair not to mention the fact that the more fame a person gains in a specific field, the more income he would have from his niche. Consequently, it would provide him with a brilliant future.
To put it briefly, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that keeping the job of parents is most likely to be a lucrative job in future. But that was the story in a nutshell. In fact, there are a multiplicity of other reasons, challenging the above statement, which could be mentioned but are not embraced due to the dearth of time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, consequently, first, hence, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, as to, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8578553616 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79314436833 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528678304239 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3680589067 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.222222222 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297634186541 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878871789659 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661624599403 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178068398455 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394272465877 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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