do you agree or disagree? people should buy things made in their own country, even if they are more expensive than things made in other countries.
The question is whether people should buy things made in their own country, even if they are more expensive than things made in other countries or not. Everyone with regard to pros and cons of this issue and also his private opinion can maintain a specific direction toward this view. I strongly affirm that supporting from national production will not only affect on country's progress, but also it can alter our life. My arguments are listed below which will strengthen my point of view:
To begin with, It is axiomatic that purchasing inner products plays a crucial role in reducing unemployment. When people would rather choose their needed things in among things are made in country, spontaneously the factories and companies will confront a huge mass of demands; hence a request for attracting human force will be created. On the other hand, the companies and other economics organizations will avoid bankruptcy. Consequently when the economics of country optimize, its effects will be revealed in all sections of country and even families’ life.
The second reason that I advocate this idea lies in the fact that there is a certain rule in marketing related with quality. If a factory arrives to a peak of selling, gradually its managers make a decision based on boosting quality of product. It goes without saying that such a quality, will not only make people satisfied, but also it can absorb other countries' attention toward itself, and subsequently exporting industry will be improved.
I am going to empower my claims with following discussion. Nobody could overlook this reality that when a country obtains enough money from its economics, it will be able to provide numerous facilities for people as building up a great number of universities, hospitals, national parks, trade roots and list goes on. It is an undeniable fact that such a community has ability of competition with other communities.
By taking all above mentioned arguments, this conclusion could be drawn that people with procuring internal goods help to their economics country for providing an ideal life for them.
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supporting from national production will not only affect on country's progress, but also it can alter our life.
Description: 'Not only...but also' is not used properly. can you re-write this sentence?
When people would rather choose their needed things in among things are made in country,
When people would rather choose their needed things in among things which are made in country,
When people would rather choose their needed things in among things made in country,
such a quality, will not only make people satisfied, but also it can absorb other countries' attention toward itself,
Description: 'Not only...but also' is not used properly. can you re-write this sentence?
people with procuring internal goods help to their economics country for providing an ideal life for them.
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 344 350
No. of Characters: 1719 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.997 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.634 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.782 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.459 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.035 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 359, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
... from national production will not only affect on countrys progress, but also it can alte...
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Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
...cs organizations will avoid bankruptcy. Consequently when the economics of country optimize,...
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Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...satisfied, but also it can absorb other countries attention toward itself, and subsequent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, look, second, so, then, to begin with, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14244186047 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7489104361 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604651162791 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9593606226 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.357142857 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209944636904 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791115069093 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17700753321 0.0737576698707 240% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110976144238 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108410160547 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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