Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people argue that any development is always for better. Indeed, progress in technology and medicine has been letting people save time and access advanced medications. However, other people are convinced that a progression is not so positive. Personally, I think that progress always has its advantages and drawbacks. There are a few reasons why I hold this stance.
First of all, technological development causes an environmental deterioration. In the nineteen century, the industrial revolution took place. Owners of large factories preferred use machines rather than a hand labor to produce goods. Nowadays, all factories operated by machinery. The machinery requires a huge amount of energy to run. This energy mostly produced by burning charcoal, gas or oil. In turn, the burning result in an emission of a tremendous amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere, which causes global warming. Consequences of the global warming are terrible – numerous species of animals have been disappearing. For instance, according to National Geographic magazine, in the Polar Region, the rising of the global temperature resulted in a population of fish to decline. Fish is a forage for polar bears. If the bears have no food, they will eventually die out. Therefore, the perspectives of the further technological progression can be quite sad.
Secondly, genetic engineering has been putting people`s health in danger. The scientific discovery of genes and their structure was one of the most prominent breakthroughs in the history of the human race. By changing amino acids` sequences in a gene, scholars were able to create a variety of new foods for the mass consuming. The genetically modified food is tasty, inexpensive and has a long shelf life, and therefore, it is appealing to the consumers. Yet, the recent studies have discovered that the genetically modified food causes a number of life-threatening ailments such as cancer. If people found out that they had cancer at the onset of the disease, they could have a chance to cure. Otherwise, they could die. Despite the fact, that these days, numerous medications are available to treat cancer, most of them are extremely costly, and not every patient can afford them. To that end, the scientific progress can be fatal for a myriad of people on the planet.
To conclude, I think that any advancement has benefits and drawbacks. This is because by improving one aspect of life, it threatening others by jeopardizing our well-being and nature.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...jeopardizing our well-being and nature.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25621890547 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03403158189 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599502487562 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0322099386 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.4642857143 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3571428571 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67857142857 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0593137094335 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0160921594601 0.076458572812 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282005180133 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0399164901147 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498958687951 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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