Do you agree or disagree?
Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.
It goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world where the technology growing so fast that it could hardly be believed, successful people have played a prominent role in all societies. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that earning a lot of money is the only index of success in individual’s life while others look at this concept through a different lens. From my vantage point, sense of satisfaction is the main indicator of people's success. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that many people define success as helping to improve human life instead of how much money they can make. They devote their time and money to aid people in different ways. A well-known example of this type is Mother Teresa who travel to many different poor countries and founded many charity centers all over the world. Another notable person who sacrifice his own comfort and life to enhance quality of people’s life, is professor John Nash. In spite of his illness, he continued his work and after years he proposed an important economic theory which is now the base of our economic system. I believe, there are many simpler ways, if they just want to be a rich person.
Although the aforementioned reason are the first ones which cross the mind at first glance, they are by no means the only reason available. Actually, there is another subtle point which must be born in mind that many wealthy people do not declare themselves as a successful person. The noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics, revealed by a recent social research conducted in our country, show that more than 48 percent of the top wealthiest layer of society do not feel pleasant about the way of their life. Their main regrets were that why did not they help people, did not they increase their knowledge and did not they apply for their dream job. This is my deep belief that earning more money is not equal to success.
To make a long story short, different people describe “success” in a wide variety of aspect of view. However, I believe, when an individual feels satisfying in life, he/she is a successful person. If one weights the merits and demerits of the above statements, one soon realizes that earning more money is not a symbol of one’s success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...his type is Mother Teresa who travel to many different poor countries and founded many charity...
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Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun charity seems to be countable; consider using: 'many charities'.
Suggestion: many charities
...ny different poor countries and founded many charity centers all over the world. Another not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, look, so, well, while, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89526184539 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73527777685 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581047381546 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.074287105 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.055555556 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164866007376 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520904335689 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494959400043 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993759623894 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292770802691 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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